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BuntCakez
Aliastra
Gallente Federation
#1 - 2013-07-30 23:12:58 UTC
http://noumpsy.blogspot.co.uk/2013/07/fallen-angels.html

The story would take quite a while to post here piece by piece here, so i just posted it on my useless little blog.

Anyway, ive been writing this story for well over half a year now, partially due to uni work, partially cos im lazy and partially cos i was unhappy with how the story was going.

So after writing and rewriting it several times, i have finally settled on the one in that blog.

The original idea was to write a story much darker that the average story written on the EVE fiction forum. I wanted to show the darker side of the EVE galaxy, and even though there are already Chronicles about the Blood Raiders (chronicles im very fond off because of how awesome they are) i decided to invent a small piece of lore about them. Whether it sticks or not doesnt really matter.

I still cant say im 100% happy with the way the story had come out overall, but for the moment im not sure how to improve the areas im unhappy with.

So any and all constructive criticism is welcome, and i hope you enjoy the read :)
Fangoria Sickofantic
Doomheim
#2 - 2013-09-27 07:44:48 UTC
I liked it very much.
Well thought out and grabs you and keeps you reading tell the very end.
I've read a few story's here, yours by far takes the best of category I think.

OUTSTANDING READ !
BuntCakez
Aliastra
Gallente Federation
#3 - 2013-09-29 21:35:27 UTC
thank you very much for that :)

it honestly makes me so god damn glad that people enjoyed it... its the most i could ask for :D
Fangoria Sickofantic
Doomheim
#4 - 2013-10-02 15:02:11 UTC
CCP Should READ this and then hire you.
you left allot of room for us to fill in with our imaginations and a solid story like this fits in
perfectly with Eve lore.

Keep writing man, And best of luck with your next story.
BuntCakez
Aliastra
Gallente Federation
#5 - 2013-10-02 23:20:40 UTC
can i just ask the opinion of anyone who read this...

should i continue this story line? or should i leave this a move on to creating a different one? :P
Turk MacRumien
The Scope
Gallente Federation
#6 - 2013-10-03 13:52:49 UTC
Good read - a little distrurbing, but then it was about the blood raiders, so I guess thats a good thing
Fangoria Sickofantic
Doomheim
#7 - 2013-10-06 04:22:42 UTC
BuntCakez wrote:
can i just ask the opinion of anyone who read this...

should i continue this story line? or should i leave this a move on to creating a different one? :P


Yes you should.

If I didn't know better id say you were a bloodraider keeping a log of your exploits.
Eliana Eros
Sentinel Event
Hatakani Trade Winds Combine
#8 - 2013-10-16 19:42:00 UTC
Nice i like it. Would like the next chapter to revolve around main char development from a lowly recruit to the next level. Each chapter either advancing him or seeing his demotion.

For me...i hate white knights. I personally, like to create black knights. So it would seem that your char development potential can go that way very easily, or just skip that part all together.

As i rarely check the fiction section if you write a second part you should pm me.

♥'s and Glomps for everyone...well almost everyone.

Ze Goggles
cpt Varox
Brutor Tribe
Minmatar Republic
#9 - 2013-10-21 08:29:29 UTC
Nice read :).