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Story - First Fiction Attempt

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Eko'mo
Eko Research Institute
#1 - 2012-04-29 20:35:38 UTC  |  Edited by: Eko'mo
Seems like the interest in fiction is quite low at the moment, this is one of the least posted in sections of the forum!

In the absence of Chronicles I thought I would put up something I've been working out for awhile. Originally my idea was to make this a graphic novel of sorts however illustration is beyond me due to factors of time and skills..

Writing and blog novice, so um help! Any advice and tips welcomed

PART 1
PART 2
PART 3



EVElopedia Version (will be updated also but minus any illustrations)



Quote:
Stars reflect deeply into a glistening eye, the lid gently closes producing a tear. The eye gazes out once more, trying, failing to take in the radiant beauty of the cosmos. She is suspended in space and time, like a foetus with the combined suns of the universe serving as her a womb.


Floating in an endless stream of stars.


Bliss for the first time.


She is brought close to a field of twinkling lights, they are like stars, not stars, closer still. Burning wrecks. Those that have mobility use it to limp away from each other. Some are still breaking apart and spilling out fire, oxygen and human beings from their depths.

She wakes up. Her eyes slowly open. An unconventional reaction to such nightmarish visions, if truth be told given the circumstance of this reality, she preferred the dream.

Her room vibrates constantly; the gentle pulse of the ship is soothing despite the cold angular Caldari design ethic. They are in deep space recon for the corp, on the lookout or any wrecks turning up, desperation has pushed them into lowsec. Concord does not know these regions, the pirates do.

http://ekolikecrayons.wordpress.com/about/

Jeyson Vicious
The Scope
Gallente Federation
#2 - 2012-05-02 05:06:37 UTC
I like how you write. Concise but paints the picture.

A-
Eko'mo
Eko Research Institute
#3 - 2012-05-25 12:29:49 UTC
Thanks for the feedback!

Still trying to find a format that works well to read

Innocence Part 2

http://ekolikecrayons.wordpress.com/about/

Eko'mo
Eko Research Institute
#4 - 2012-06-18 13:28:19 UTC
Next part I have done.

Look upon it and despair

Innocence Part 3

http://ekolikecrayons.wordpress.com/about/

Ssakaa
Animatar Foundation
#5 - 2012-06-18 13:57:54 UTC
Reading present tense (Part one) is always nice. Besides, whom among us could dislike 'ekolikecrayons' as a header?

You may want to run part three past a proof-reader a little, though, no offence intended.

Onwards!

"Modern Life is Rubbish"

Eko'mo
Eko Research Institute
#6 - 2012-06-18 18:16:40 UTC
Ssakaa wrote:
Reading present tense (Part one) is always nice. Besides, whom among us could dislike 'ekolikecrayons' as a header?

You may want to run part three past a proof-reader a little, though, no offence intended.

Onwards!


I'm difficult if not impossible to offend! If you see anything sloppy and awkward or badly written it's because I don't know what I'm doing and I need help. I'll have a few more whiskies then I'll write something good.

Eko do like crayons

http://ekolikecrayons.wordpress.com/about/

Ssakaa
Animatar Foundation
#7 - 2012-06-18 19:07:27 UTC
Eko'mo wrote:

I'm difficult if not impossible to offend! If you see anything sloppy and awkward or badly written it's because I don't know what I'm doing and I need help. I'll have a few more whiskies then I'll write something good.

Eko do like crayons


She does indeed.

No, no sloppiness, not badly written -just a couple of misplaced characters and so on. Being nit-picky.

Didn't mean to discourage -quite the opposite. Imho your character development is looking good - how long you intend to develop them is entirely up to you -into miniscule depth or less so.




"Modern Life is Rubbish"