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WhyYouHeffToBeMad IsOnlyGame
#1 - 2014-10-21 20:51:41 UTC
This sentence has five words
By Gary Provost

This sentence has five words.
Here are five more words. Five word sentences are fine. But several together become monotonous. Listen to what is happening. The writing is getting boring. The sound of it drones. It's like a stuck record. The ear demands more variety.

Now listen. I vary the sentence length, and I create music. The writing sings. It has a pleasant rhythm, a lilt, a harmony. I use short sentences. and I use sentences of medium length.

And sometimes, when I am certain the reader is rested, I will engage him with a sentence of considerable length, a sentence that burns with energy and builds with all the impetus of a crescendo, the roll of the drums, the crash of the cymbals - sounds that say Listen to this, this is important.

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Khergit Deserters
Crom's Angels
#2 - 2014-10-22 01:38:02 UTC  |  Edited by: Khergit Deserters
Very nice, and good writing style advice. I'm guilty of a TL;DR sentence, followed by yet another TL;DR. And one more for good measure. Make flow, not be work for the reader. o7 OP.
ISD Dorrim Barstorlode
ISD Community Communications Liaisons
ISD Alliance
#3 - 2014-10-22 17:18:22 UTC
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