EVE General Discussion

Apologies for my wall of text, if you read my edit on my first post it does state I tried breaking it up with indents and such but Eve-O forums doesnt let me.

That being said... Books are usually massive walls are texts... It is in sence a short story competition, so walls of texts are kinda to be expected no?

Anywho, last day to get your stories in!!! Lets have the ante upped! The more in this competition the better the challange

Captain Vollel Yyx had led a full life, or at least as full a life as possible for a Caldari Navy Officer. He had worked his way up the ranks, eventually making it to Captain Rank 2 only a few months ago. This new appointment came with the command of his own vessel and an extensive array of new technology and training. He could name every ship he had ever served on, from frigates to cruisers, which was to be expected of every naval officer. And after sixty two years of service, that was a lot of vessels.
Yyx stood on the balcony of his quarters looking out onto the hanger where his ship sat. A Condor. It was perfect; newly built for him to fly in training and in the very mission he was about to undertake. There was no crew compliment to accompany the ship however, there was no need for them. Not any more.
One ship. One crew member.
Before now, these ships used to have a full crew compliment right down to the engineers. No more. The Captain of the ship would take on the role of everyone through an invention kept classified to the masses and only given to the Caldari. Only those involved with this new invention knew of the background to this amazing technology; by that, it was meant that they only knew where it had come from. They did not fully understand how the technology worked, nor were they told.
“Captain,” A relatively short but stocky man spoke from behind him, “Orders just come in. I am to escort you to your ship.” He sprung up a salute to which the Captain returned.
“Lead on… then… Lieutenant.” Yyx’s voice came out cracked with a pang of nervousness. He immediately cleared his throat. This time it came out crisp and clear, with a sense of command. “Lead on”.

Captain Vollel Yyx had led a full life, or at least as full a life as possible for a Caldari Navy Officer. He had worked his way up the ranks, eventually making it to Captain Rank 2 only a few months ago. This new appointment came with the command of his own vessel and an extensive array of new technology and training. He could name every ship he had ever served on, from frigates to cruisers, which was to be expected of every naval officer. And after sixty two years of service, that was a lot of vessels.

Yyx stood on the balcony of his quarters looking out onto the hanger where his ship sat. A Condor. It was perfect; newly built for him to fly in training and in the very mission he was about to undertake. There was no crew compliment to accompany the ship however, there was no need for them. Not any more.

One ship. One crew member.

Before now, these ships used to have a full crew compliment right down to the engineers. No more. The Captain of the ship would take on the role of everyone through an invention kept classified to the masses and only given to the Caldari. Only those involved with this new invention knew of the background to this amazing technology; by that, it was meant that they only knew where it had come from. They did not fully understand how the technology worked, nor were they told.

“Captain,” A relatively short but stocky man spoke from behind him, “Orders just come in. I am to escort you to your ship.” He sprung up a salute to which the Captain returned.

“Lead on… then… Lieutenant.” Yyx’s voice came out cracked with a pang of nervousness. He immediately cleared his throat. This time it came out crisp and clear, with a sense of command. “Lead on”.

Pretty sure books don't have a line between every single paragraph.

And if you cant read 20 lines that don't have a lines space between nearly every sentence then you need help in my opinion

Edit: I started off initially with a gap between everything like you just put in the "readable" part, and it actually nearly doubled my pages and made it look terrible.

In MS word, where I originally wrote it, everything was indented and it was edited much better, next time I am going to be using a site I can indent on however.

Second Edit: For reference: Lord of the Rings: The Two Towers (page picked at random)