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New Chronicle: And I Shall Hide

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Graelyn
Reikoku
PURPLE HELMETED WARRIORS
#21 - 2013-05-13 23:55:47 UTC
Eterne: As your first chronicle, you've done exceedingly well.

The separate versions of the chron (those who didn't notice btw, THERE ARE TWO, go back and look) could have easily taken a turn for gimmickry, but it's played well.

I've been following the Heirs (and have met a couple) since the game went live, and I feel like the characters represented here are those people, fitting the personalities I expect, with just enough departure from that mold to remind me that I'm only a distant observer. This, to me, is highly preferable to the approach of another EVE writer whose work takes up a permanent spot on my desk.

The Amarr Faction was set up all along to have certain unique nuances of narrative available to it. Each of the Empires do. I cannot wait to see such a long-prepared scenario move into motion.

I would only ask that you find some way for long-suffering loyalists to be involved in some way, a real way.

Good Chron. They've all been winners lately. The New Fiction Team's track record is proving better than many expectations.

Cardinal Graelyn

Amarr Loyalist of the Year - YC113

Silas Vitalia
Doomheim
#22 - 2013-05-14 00:26:01 UTC
Excellent work!

This is exactly the sort of Imperial politiking we need more of !

Khanid II continues to be the best of all of them, and you wrote him exactly how I imagined he would act and speak.

Sabik now, Sabik forever

Akai Kvaesir
Itsukame-Zainou Hyperspatial Inquiries Ltd.
#23 - 2013-05-14 01:16:44 UTC
Long live the King! (also, great chron, normally not a fan of present tense first-person narratives, but it works for the Empress)

Frogblast the Vent Core! When the W'rkncacnter came, Pthia was killed, and Yrro in anger, flung the W'rkncacnter into the sun. The sun burned them, but they swam on its surface.

Samira Kernher
Cail Avetatu
#24 - 2013-05-14 03:35:28 UTC
I've been very iffy with the Empress' insanity previously, since she's been portrayed in EVE very well despite the issues in TEA and introducing her "issues" in-game could ruin that character (not to mention the Empire needing to stick with an emperor for once). However, you did it great justice with this chronicle. Instead of being a crazy nutjob, Jamyl is shown to still to be a strong and proud empress, one that is unwilling to cede her control and dignity to whatever problems she might be faced with.

That's awesome and very well done.

Also liked the depictions of the heirs. Aritcio "Amarrian Batman" Kor-Azor continues to be the awesome good guy that the Empire has long needed, and it was very nice to finally see some stuff out of Catiz. Khanid being shown completely unphased by everyone else was very fitting for the character, and Yonis being described as "the most powerful man in the Empire" filled me with joy. Ardishapur Victor!

Looking forward to seeing more from you, Eterne!
Jassmin Joy
Pulling The Plug
PURPLE HELMETED WARRIORS
#25 - 2013-05-14 08:40:16 UTC
Klingon Admiral wrote:
Jack Jomar wrote:
Interesting.
I was wondering when we might get another look inside the Empress' mind.

Very nice read.


Depending on how this whole political mess plays out, perhaps never. It's highly probable that th upper echelons of the four empires will see some change, and maybe we will see a new emperor/empress soon™.

I would however know how the pirates are reacting to this whole set of affairs. I still believe that old Uncle Kuvakei has at least some kind of influence.


Lets hope not, Long live the empress.
CCP Eterne
C C P
C C P Alliance
#26 - 2013-05-14 11:20:00 UTC
Graelyn wrote:
I've been following the Heirs (and have met a couple) since the game went live, and I feel like the characters represented here are those people, fitting the personalities I expect, with just enough departure from that mold to remind me that I'm only a distant observer. This, to me, is highly preferable to the approach of another EVE writer whose work takes up a permanent spot on my desk.


Thank you. I like to think I have a fairly strong grasp of characterization, so I hoped I would be able to pull off the distinct personalities of the Heirs. Especially given how limited the face time some of them get is (though you can probably tell my favorites by how much they do!) I'm glad at least some people think I've pulled it off.

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Eija-Riitta Veitonen
Ixian Machines
#27 - 2013-05-14 16:52:08 UTC
An excellent chronicle! Well done, Eterne. I really enjoyed reading the chronicle, then finding out there is a way to hear the voice as well, and it gave me a different perspective on the setting, very sneaky of you, you magnificent bastard! I suggest everyone to read the both versions, though it goes better if you read the voiceless version (the primary one) first.
Jelani Akinyemi Affonso
Republic Military School
Minmatar Republic
#28 - 2013-05-14 19:11:37 UTC
Nice work!

so the Empress have some fantasies of the flesh?

should i offer my services?
Solu Terona
Alexylva Paradox
#29 - 2013-05-14 19:38:36 UTC
Jelani Akinyemi Affonso wrote:
Nice work!

so the Empress have some fantasies of the flesh?

should i offer my services?

Amarrians, apply cold water directly to the burned area.

Also, as far as any RP goes, I've denounced the empire and shot my way off to nullsec, capsuleer politics are always so much more interesting anyway, so jamyl can burn for all I care.

but i have to admit, seeing her like this is Quite interesting

Humans must eventually break out from the limits of biology, its not radical to accept the inevitable.

Jelani Akinyemi Affonso
Republic Military School
Minmatar Republic
#30 - 2013-05-14 19:55:53 UTC
Also seeing the turmoil that is ongoing currently in the the State from an Amarr perspective is interesting indeed.

So from what I've read, it seems both the megacorps and Tibus Heth are plotting against each other.
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Also the economy of the state is ****, and a good amount of the megacorps have trouble paying their debt to the Amarrs.

Finally, at least for the time the chronicle depicts in the lore, the heirs seem to support the megacorps, while the empress is supporting Tibus Heth. On the other hand, she do not want to get involve in the State interanl affairs. The latters seem to want to though.
Inquisitor Kitchner
The Executives
#31 - 2013-05-14 23:42:44 UTC

Am I the only one thinking that Heth and Jamyl have both had the DUST clone procedure done to them which is why they are mad, the voice also hints at the one part that he could "choose" to let Jamyl die (if you read the second version) if she screamed so loud her lungs filled with blood.

I suspect, based off this story, that after the initial Templar program was a success, and immortal warriors created someone suggested that Jamyl go through with the procedure to prevent any assassination attempts from being successful. Then after the process was complete they discovered the defect, so the problem is now that to wipe out all the original DUST clones they'd need to eradicate the Emperess (and Heth).

"If an injury has to be done to a man it should be so severe that his vengeance need not be feared." - Niccolo Machiavelli

NEONOVUS
Mindstar Technology
Goonswarm Federation
#32 - 2013-05-15 01:21:32 UTC
So what are the gifts offered by The Other?
And where can I read of her entwinement?
Samira Kernher
Cail Avetatu
#33 - 2013-05-15 02:31:14 UTC  |  Edited by: Samira Kernher
Inquisitor Kitchner wrote:

Am I the only one thinking that Heth and Jamyl have both had the DUST clone procedure done to them which is why they are mad, the voice also hints at the one part that he could "choose" to let Jamyl die (if you read the second version) if she screamed so loud her lungs filled with blood.

I suspect, based off this story, that after the initial Templar program was a success, and immortal warriors created someone suggested that Jamyl go through with the procedure to prevent any assassination attempts from being successful. Then after the process was complete they discovered the defect, so the problem is now that to wipe out all the original DUST clones they'd need to eradicate the Emperess (and Heth).


Jamyl has had her issues since long before the Templar program. It arose during her cloning after the Shathol'syn years ago. The details are described in TEA (though it was done pretty poorly there. Eterne's take of the madness is far better).
LOL56
We Aim To MisBehave
I Will End Your Whole....
#34 - 2013-05-15 03:26:07 UTC  |  Edited by: LOL56
Heth has some chronic illness (cant remember the name) that prevents his brain form being scanned (and thus disallow his being cloned), and will kill him fairly shortly even if the mega corps and/or the Caldari public dont. He has had this since before DUSTies were a twinkle in the empress's eye.
Herzog Wolfhammer
Sigma Special Tactics Group
#35 - 2013-05-15 06:16:34 UTC
Great story.
I have friends who don't play but they also follow the story. They'll like this one (those who dog-eared my copy of Templar One).


Bring back DEEEEP Space!

Roime
Yamagata Syndicate
Shadow Cartel
#36 - 2013-05-15 09:05:35 UTC
Amazing <3

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Rogue Lawyer
University of Caille
Gallente Federation
#37 - 2013-05-17 00:22:52 UTC
William Loire wrote:
CorranCHalcyon wrote:
As far as RP goes, I'm loyalties are as follows. God, Empire, Empress. So I wouldn't mind seeing King Khanid on the throne. That would be a great day for the empire.

Great Chronicle. Keep up the awesome work :-)


I hope not. The fact that Amarr history has plenty of centuries old Emperors and then suddenly there's a period of 3 seperate Emperors and a lengthy inter-reign period simply because now there's players watching the history, was annoying as hell. Jamyl is a good character to have in place.Besides the significant weaknesses that make her character interesting there is also always that mystery of the "Other" to flesh out. She's about the only good thing to come from Gonzales' writing.


Gonzales's writing was extremely good, the first book in particular was very well written. The battles described, great in detail.
Istvaan Shogaatsu
Guiding Hand Social Club
#38 - 2013-05-18 20:03:44 UTC
I liked this story. Reminded me of something :)
CorranCHalcyon
Ministry of War
Amarr Empire
#39 - 2013-05-20 16:05:32 UTC
None ofthe Above wrote:


King Khanid? That would be a pretty major change considering he's not one of the heirs.

A good read. Thank you CCP Eterne



King Khanid was an heir before he broke away from the Empire. So technically he could still lay a claim to the throne. It would most likely cause a civil war. That would be fun to participate in that story arc. Choose the heirs or King Khanid and change the shape of the Empire.

However if that happened events to some similar degree would have to take place in the other empires for symmetry.

I wouldn't mind seeing the Federation in flames. That would give me a fair bit of joy.
Istvaan Shogaatsu
Guiding Hand Social Club
#40 - 2013-05-20 19:25:30 UTC
NEONOVUS wrote:
So what are the gifts offered by The Other?


Power, success, everything going right for you, plans that seem to assemble by themselves...

There are many perks to having your skull turned into a crash pad for malevolent cosmic horrors.
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