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New Chronicle: After The Fall

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Borgholio
Borgholio's Collective
#21 - 2013-03-25 13:02:40 UTC
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Because sooner or later they'd wonder why my plants were growing so well, in this forsaken place. And eventually they'd come in with shovels, either to investigate or destroy.

And it wouldn't be long before they started finding the bodies.


So who was buried in his garden? His fellow Gallente whom he conspired against? Caldari guards?

You will be assimilated...bunghole!
Rees Noturana
Red Rock Mining Company
#22 - 2013-03-25 13:29:48 UTC
Dog lives. That's all that really matters. You kill off the dog and you go on the list, right above the Amarr.

_ _
Jedi 0men
Long Term Capital Management..
#23 - 2013-03-25 13:32:57 UTC
This event and the lore surrounding it has definitely received my attention. It would be interesting to see a plethora of viewpoints and responses for the evolution of this story. Perhaps even the opportunity of seeing the horror of a Caldari mechanic or similar aboard the monolithic vessel as it fell from the skies, or a Minmatar sympathizer on the ground in another location.

This story has so much potential and I look forward to its continued development.

These arn't the Roids you're Looking For...
Akrasjel Lanate
Immemorial Coalescence Administration
Immemorial Coalescence
#24 - 2013-03-25 13:41:51 UTC
This was really nice chron Big smile

CEO of Lanate Industries

Citizen of Solitude
Enthustas
Aliastra
Gallente Federation
#25 - 2013-03-25 13:56:50 UTC
I enjoyed reading this very much :) Good job!
ChromeStriker
Sebiestor Tribe
Minmatar Republic
#26 - 2013-03-25 14:15:44 UTC
\o/ yay the dog lived

No Worries
Indahmawar Fazmarai
#27 - 2013-03-25 14:34:21 UTC
Interesting read, but that end feels unnatural, like a deus ex machina gratuitously shoehorned in. IMHO, a single line about the elder wandering the streets each night as a part of his daily habits would have sufficed to open that loop before closing it.
Malrock
Space noobs forever
#28 - 2013-03-25 14:37:48 UTC
And what we can conclude ?

Instead of relocating gallente scum we should of nuked them from orbit Twisted
Goun-Hung Lo
Garoun Investment Bank
Gallente Federation
#29 - 2013-03-25 14:40:58 UTC
Malrock wrote:
And what we can conclude ?

Instead of relocating gallente scum we should of nuked them from orbit Twisted



Be careful there, without Tibus Heth you're looking at New Caldari with more than just a few craters.
Nathan Jameson
Grumpy Bastards
#30 - 2013-03-25 14:50:14 UTC
Borgholio wrote:
Quote:
Because sooner or later they'd wonder why my plants were growing so well, in this forsaken place. And eventually they'd come in with shovels, either to investigate or destroy.

And it wouldn't be long before they started finding the bodies.


So who was buried in his garden? His fellow Gallente whom he conspired against? Caldari guards?


I had the impression it was the Gallente who were going to dig up his garden. The Caldari guards sending a message, so to speak.

http://www.wormholes.info
Super Chair
Project Cerberus
Templis CALSF
#31 - 2013-03-25 14:57:03 UTC
Sean Parisi wrote:
Roime wrote:
First for the Federation \o/

...and yes, it's a good one. Cheers!


First for the superior and clearly better looking Caldari.



fixed Big smile
Markus Reese
Deep Core Mining Inc.
Caldari State
#32 - 2013-03-25 15:03:34 UTC
Good job guys.

To quote Lfod Shi

The ratting itself is PvE. Getting away with it is PvP.
RADTrooper
Center for Advanced Studies
Gallente Federation
#33 - 2013-03-25 15:50:46 UTC
Well, it was his neighbors who disappeared first. . .

Maybe he just wanted a larger garden?
Steve Ronuken
Fuzzwork Enterprises
Vote Steve Ronuken for CSM
#34 - 2013-03-25 15:58:28 UTC
The way I figure it, he's a serial killer. Who just stuffed the bodies in his garden. After all, he's Gallente... Blink

This one is pretty damn nice to the Caldari.

Woo! CSM XI!

Fuzzwork Enterprises

Twitter: @fuzzysteve on Twitter
Borgholio
Borgholio's Collective
#35 - 2013-03-25 16:04:19 UTC
Nathan Jameson wrote:
Borgholio wrote:
Quote:
Because sooner or later they'd wonder why my plants were growing so well, in this forsaken place. And eventually they'd come in with shovels, either to investigate or destroy.

And it wouldn't be long before they started finding the bodies.


So who was buried in his garden? His fellow Gallente whom he conspired against? Caldari guards?


I had the impression it was the Gallente who were going to dig up his garden. The Caldari guards sending a message, so to speak.


Yeah me too, but then I read that the Gallente were lead away by the guards...they weren't killed just stunned.

You will be assimilated...bunghole!
Nyancat Audeles
Center for Advanced Studies
Gallente Federation
#36 - 2013-03-25 16:14:10 UTC
Sean Parisi wrote:
Roime wrote:
First for the Federation \o/

...and yes, it's a good one. Cheers!


First for the superior Caldari.


As a Jovian, I honestly don't care.
Rinai Vero
Blades of Liberty
#37 - 2013-03-25 16:17:10 UTC
Indahmawar Fazmarai wrote:
Interesting read, but that end feels unnatural, like a deus ex machina gratuitously shoehorned in. IMHO, a single line about the elder wandering the streets each night as a part of his daily habits would have sufficed to open that loop before closing it.



I agree, the ending felt unnatural to me as well. I think some foreshadowing would have helped. Although, it does raise some interesting ideas on further reflection. Once you understand that the old man could be a serial killer, the actions taken by the community can be seen in a different light. Perhaps they were digging up the garden looking for evidence?
Dasquirrel715
Aurora.
The Initiative.
#38 - 2013-03-25 16:34:06 UTC
Tasiv Deka wrote:
Ill read it over my lunch break but i have to ask is this going to be as biased against Caldari as ccp is? (i know its a gallente POV but still...)

I mean this isnt some in character rant or anything but seriously its kind of irritating seeing Caldari (and Amarr) get the short end of the stick on quite a few things.

still though i'll read it and hopefully it isnt too biased



Well its not like Caldari weren't winning the war for years. I mean they took back caldari prime and let luminaire in occupation.
Goun-Hung Lo
Garoun Investment Bank
Gallente Federation
#39 - 2013-03-25 17:09:42 UTC
Dasquirrel715 wrote:
Tasiv Deka wrote:
Ill read it over my lunch break but i have to ask is this going to be as biased against Caldari as ccp is? (i know its a gallente POV but still...)

I mean this isnt some in character rant or anything but seriously its kind of irritating seeing Caldari (and Amarr) get the short end of the stick on quite a few things.

still though i'll read it and hopefully it isnt too biased



Well its not like Caldari weren't winning the war for years. I mean they took back caldari prime and let luminaire in occupation.

The only reason they took back Caldari Prime was because a traitor leaked information on the Gallente security network, add that with 95% of the Caldari Navy and the odds were clearly on the State's side.

This battle showed that the Gallente Federation will not tolerate the Caldari intrusion any longer!

Glory to the Federation!
Elrianmk2
#40 - 2013-03-25 17:20:17 UTC
Now that was a damn fine story. Incidentally the deaths are alluded to if you read into it a bit more!

Sometimes "Meh" is an acceptable response.