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Dsan
Bedlam.
#1 - 2012-06-07 06:51:13 UTC
Hi, I wrote a thing.

And I'm looking for extra sets of eyes on the piece.
It is in a google doc document, so I'll give you view access to it, and from there you can highlight and give notes into the piece.

This blog post/article is going to be posted several places, first on crossingzebras.com - And if you wish, I will write you on it as a critic/editor.

I need up to 5 with perspective into highsec industrial, the jita market and prices, political perspective, and such.

Send me an ingame mail or reply with your google account, so I can unlock the document for you.

Best regards Dsan.

Or follow me on twitter: http://twitter.com/Dsan_dk
Dsan
Bedlam.
#2 - 2012-06-07 09:05:42 UTC
So yeah, thanks to.. no body.
It's posted and really really great.

go check it out on www.crossingzebras.com

Or follow me on twitter: http://twitter.com/Dsan_dk
Steve Ronuken
Fuzzwork Enterprises
Vote Steve Ronuken for CSM
#3 - 2012-06-07 10:02:59 UTC
3 hours, in a quiet time, isn't going to get you many responses.

If you'd posted the message a few hours from now, you'd possibly have got something.

Woo! CSM XI!

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Velicitia
XS Tech
#4 - 2012-06-07 10:03:43 UTC  |  Edited by: Velicitia
three hour delay between your posts ... perhaps people haven't gotten around to here yet (I know I just opened S&I)




Edit -- read the blog post, and it's not terribly wrong from what I've seen. Some things are a bit off (or otherwise glossed over), but in general it's correct.

One of the bitter points of a good bittervet is the realisation that all those SP don't really do much, and that the newbie is having much more fun with what little he has. - Tippia
Dsan
Bedlam.
#5 - 2012-06-08 09:07:19 UTC
Thanks, and yes. I know it was kind of on a whim.
The Zebras was getting impatcient, I had it written - so posted it asap.
I have gotten some feedback on ingame mail, and used it and re-posted the article on:
www.carebearnation.com

Which is a new site for article and guides, which are all user made.
Everyone who posts a guide or article on CBN gets a writers fee, and help coelate the good guides and community content in one place. so yeah, I'll be writing some more stuff for them, and looking for content to post on CBN - if anyone else is interrested in the fee/kickback.

CBN is a EN24 subsidiary, but not news and gossip. but guides and articles.

Or follow me on twitter: http://twitter.com/Dsan_dk
RubyPorto
RubysRhymes
#6 - 2012-06-08 12:10:50 UTC
It's reasonably accurate, not exactly concise, and doesn't really contain any new information or analysis.

Solidly in the B- territory. Keep working on writing concisely and focus on analyzing information and presenting that analysis rather than simply presenting it with pretty pictures added.

"It's easy to speak for the silent majority. They rarely object to what you put into their mouths." -Abrazzar "the risk of having your day ruined by other people is the cornerstone with which EVE was built" -CCP Solomon
Nikodiemus
Ganja Clade
Shadow Cartel
#7 - 2012-06-08 18:18:20 UTC
Analysis is the most important after of course accurate information but picture are a good thing and do a lot to help further your point and make your case. Always use tasteful images if it adds an element to visualize your data, just don't overdo it. I thought the pics were mostly ok.

Keep writing, a more formal tone may help and Eve players love sarcasm and dry humor never hurt.